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英语四级作文分类 比较对照预测范文及点评 04:大学生怎样利用好长假?

Topic 4 Long Holidays
I.长假给大学生带来的好处
2.长假可能给大学生带来的问题
3.我应当怎样利用好长假

Long Holidays

As regards the necessity of long holidays, there has been a heated discussion among college students. Those who lend their support to it argue that long holidays provide them a better chance to travel around and establish broader vision. In addition, they can take part-time jobs in long holidays,which makes them get closer contact with the society.

By contrast,others hold that students may fail to make good use of long holidays.  Instead,they become addicted to various computer games or just sleep a lot. What's worse, the past 5 years has witnessed a sharp increase in the amount of money college students spent on traveling during the long holidays from ¥ 368 , 000 , 000 to ¥825,000,000,which undoubtedly raise the economic burden of their family.

As far as I am concerned,I will strike a balance between relaxing myself through traveling or playing games and study.(147词)

“一句话”点评

第二段中的两个数据将首先吸引阅卷老师的眼球,同时该句还使用了witness, sharp等好词和which引导的非限制性定语从句,这将给阅卷老师留下良好的第一印象。

快捷构思

第一段:在模板句引人话题后接着提出首段中心“长假给大学生带来的好处”,并用provide them a better chance to travel around and establish broader vision和get closer contact with the society两个原因来支持段落中心。

第二段:开门见山展现段落中心“长假可能给大学生带来的问题”。而后“一句话”数例为具体现象展示,说明大学生在长假里花的钱很多,增加了家庭负担。

第三段:直接展现自己的“骑墙派”观点,句型也相对固定,且不做更深层次的展开。

美丽词句
(1) establish broader vision开拓广阔的视野
(2) get closer contact with the society与社会近距离接触
(3)become addicted to…开始对……上瘾
(4) strike a balance between…and…在……和……之间保持平衡(strike优于keep)

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