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英语四级作文分类 比较对照预测范文及点评 05:旅游业给中国带来的利弊

lily85 于2015-12-16发布 l 已有人阅读

Topic 5 Tourism
1.旅游业正在中国迅速发展
2.旅游业给中国带来许多好处
3.然而,旅游业也带来一些问题

Tourism

Nowadays,tourism has been booming in China. According to a recent survey conducted by the Tourism Organization,the number of foreigners who travel to China increased sharply from 13 , 789 , 000 to 78 , 645 , 000 between 1999 and 2006.

The main benefits of tourism are as follows. To begin with,It enables the. Chinese to know about the outside world,which contributes to promoting friendship between countries . What's more,foreigners can see this land with a splendid culture and a civilized history of more than 5 , 000 years.

However,tourism also tourism to a number of problems. It, to some degree,has become a burden to our insufficient transportation system. It also brings in some harmful ideas from the outside world. Therefore,great attention should be paid to these problems.(128词)

“一句话”点评

毫无疑问,第一段的Tourism Organization和两个数据吸引了阅卷老师的眼球。conduct, sharply等好词的使用,无疑增加了亮点。

快捷构思

第一段:开门见山展现段落中心“旅游业正在中国迅速发展”而后“一句话”数例为具体现象展示,说明越来越多的外国人到中国旅游。

第二段:直接展现段落中心“旅游业给中国带来许多好处”,并用enables the Chinese to know about the outside world f1 see this land with a splendid culture and a civilized history of more than 5 ,000 years两个原因,来支持这个观点。

第三段:开门见山提出段落中心“旅游业也带来一些问题”,并用become  a  burden  to  our  insufficient  transportation system和brings in some harmful ideas from the outside world来支持,结尾呼吁,大家应该注意这些问题。

美丽词句
(1)contribute to导致
(2) promote friendship between countries增进国家间的友谊
(3)a splendid culture and a civilized history of more than 5 , 000 years五千年的灿烂文化和文明历史
(4) to some degree一定程度上
(5)Therefore,great attention should be paid to these problems.被动句的使用增加了文章亮点
 

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