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英语四级作文分类 比较对照真题范文及点评 08:诚实利人利己,做人应该诚实

Topic 4 2003年1月真题

Directions: For this part,you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled It Pays to Be Honest.  You should write at least 120 words following the outline liven below:
1.当前社会上存在许多不诚实的现象
2.诚实利人利己,做人应该诚实

It Pays to Be Honest

Nowadays,we often hear people's complaints about dishonesty. In fact,there are dishonest practices in all walks of life. Take food safety as an example,the past five years has witnessed an average number of 4,320 factories producing contaminated food every year,which seriously harmed people's lives and health.

It pays to be honest because being honest is beneficial to both other people and yourself. To begin with,being honest will make others relieved and devote full efforts to their work and life. In return,it will bring you true friendship and good mood,which promotes your happiness. What’s more, being honest can always bring you more business opportunities. We have heard lots of successful businessmen note that “doing business is actually testing one's moral quality.”

Being honest has become our traditional virtue and we should bear in mind to behave ourselves honestly.(143词)

“一句话”点评

第一段的数据将吸引阅卷老师的眼球让其首先关注,同时使用了witness, take... as an example.等好词与短语及producing分词做后置定语,将形成良好的第一印象。

快捷构思

第一段:描述现象,引入该段中,心“当前社会上存在许多不诚实的现象”。而后“一句话”数例,举出工厂生产污染食品的例子更加形象地说明社会上的不诚实。

第二段:开门见山提出该段主题句“诚实利人利己,做人应该诚实’,。紧接着列出了make others relieved and devote full efforts to their work and life和bring you more business opportunities支持该主题中心。

第三段:事实上,原题并没有第3个提纲,最后一段可以不写。但为了使得文章显得充实,在末段做一个简单的总结或号召是一种值得推荐的写法。

美丽词句
(1)all walks of life各行各业
(2) promotes one's happiness增加幸福感
(3) devote full efforts to奉献全部精力
(4) traditional virtue传统美德
(5) bear in mind记住(优于大家通常会写的remember)

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