Topic 9 Online Education
Nowadays，online education has become very popular among people. According to a recent survey conducted by CCTV，the past five years has witnessed a sharp increase in the number of people who has received this kind of education to an astonishing number of 9 , 745 , 000.
To account for this phenomenon，people have come up with various reasons listed below. To begin with compared with having classes at school，online education saves our time，energy and money， especially to those who are too busy to study full-time. What's more, the schedule is flexible so that we can have a free choice to study what we need in urgent and decide when，where and how to study.
As far as I am concerned，I appreciate this new form of education and also have got some benefits from it. It's indeed a helpful complement to the traditional education means.(146词)
毫无疑问，第一段的CCTV和数据将首先吸引阅卷老师的眼球，同时使用了conduct ,witness, sharp等好词和定语从句，将形成良好的第一印象。
第二段:开门见山展现段落中心“这股热潮的原因是”。并用saves our time，energy and money，especially to those who are too busy to study full-time和the schedule is flexible来支持这股热潮的原因。
(1)Online education saves our time，energy and money，espedally to those who are too busy to study full-time.网络教育节省我们的时间、精力和金钱，尤其是对那些经常忙于学习的人。(二个名词的并列使用，是文章的一大亮点。)
(2)The schedule is flexible so that we can have a free choice to study what we need in urgent and decide when，where and how to study.精彩句式，含有结果状语从句和并列句式。