[精华推荐]英语六级作文真题范文及点评:做好事是否该盼回报

英语六级作文分类 比较对照真题范文及点评 01:做好事是否该盼回报

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Topic 1 2007年6月真题

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a com­position on the topic Should One Expect Reward When Doing a Good Deed? You should write at least 150 words according to the outline given below :

1.有的人认为应该有回报
2.另外的人认为应该像雷锋一样不要回报
3.我的看法

Should One Expect Reward When Doing a Good Deed?

As regards reward when doing a good deed, there has been a heated discussion among; the general public in our society. People who believen its necessity argue that without proper reward,those who have done good deeds may sometimes be at a loss in finding themselves sacrifice a lot while others show much indifference.

By contrast, others hold that reward when doing a good deed is of no necessity. According to a recent survey conducted by China Daily, a high proportion (83.8 percent) of people believe that we should learn from Lei Feng, who has long been set as an out­standing example to encourage us to spare no efforts to help those in need,without ever asking for any reward. In their opinion, helping others is an indispensable part of virtues.

As far as I am concerned, rewards are by no means the trigger or purpose of conducting good deeds. What really matters is that we should take the initiative to help others who are in trouble. (166 词)

“一句话”点评

毫无疑问,第二段的一个百分比和大写的Chirui抓住了阅卷老师的眼球。同时还使用了 conduct, a high proportion of等好词和 who引导的非限制性定语从句,这将给阅卷老师留下良好的第一印 象。注意:比较对照型的第一段有一个比较长的模板句,所以建议把 “ 一句话”放在第二段,或具体呈现现象’或作为数例支持前面论点。

快捷构思

如本范文第一、二、三段篇幅对比和划线部分模板词句所示, 比较对照型的整篇构思清晰明了。而且,除第一段第一句为模板 句引入话题外,其他段落首句皆为段落中心句(即题目所给提纲), 第一段的第二句前半句紧跟着为段落中心,完全符合“黄金3原 则”的谋篇原则。

第一段:在模板句引人话题后接着提出首段中心“有的人认为 做好事应该有回报”,并用一负面假设说出不好结果 来支持段落中心。

第二段:开门见山展现段落中心“有些人认为做好事应该不要 回报”。而后“一句话”数例支持前面论点,说明大多数的人支持这一观点。
最后一句同义说明:帮助他人 是不可缺少的美德。 第三段:直接展现自己观点,倡导我们大家帮助那些需要帮助 的人。

美丽词句

1.be at a loss 迷茫
2.be set as an example 被树立为榜样
3.spare no efforts to 不遗余力
4.indispensable 不可缺少的(优于 necessary,important 等表达
5.by no means绝不是(强调语气,比普通的“not”更能准确传 达思想)
6.take the initiative起带头作用,倡导

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